14 May, 2012 by Kat
Writing Notes: Character Development Challenges
It was a big night for fairy tales in the Grey Cottage.
I’m sure it will need further editing, but at least this time I feel like I told the story I meant to tell. There’s an underlying theme about the disillusionment that comes from growing up in a fallen world that’s an important element of the original fairy tale, The Snow Queen. It didn’t make it into the original draft. I was able to cut a lot of fat in round 2, and work it in.
I could have taken the story to an even darker place. I had time to do a pretty extensive rewrite if I’d wanted. But I realized that there was another agenda at play in that desire, and it didn’t serve this particular story very well.
Writing fiction is therapeutic, but if you try to make it actual therapy, you end up writing stuff that only makes sense to you. That was another important lesson learned in all this.
The fat-cutting also gave me room to work in more character development for Kit, the male main character who’s based on Kai from the original story.
One of the biggest challenges with this story was making Kit a compelling character. If you’re at all familiar with The Snow Queen, it’s probably easy to guess why. Kai spends most of the story in a trance state, cold and unfeeling. Just before that, he becomes cruel and jaded to his best friend, Gerda. It’s difficult to sell the reader on investing in a character who is essentially unconscious for more than 2/3 of the story, and kind of a jerk right before that.
Also, in my version, Kit is basically the straight man and voice of reason compared to Greta. His personality is much more subdued. All my beta readers of draft 1 said Greta jumped off the page, but it was hard to connect with Kit. It would’ve been easy to let him become a featureless, unmemorable “Disney prince,” only important as a plot device and love interest for the quirky, heroic female main character.
But that wasn’t the story I wanted to tell. While the obvious conflict in the story is about the Snow Queen and her dastardly plans, there’s a deeper relational conflict that’s just as important, at least to me.
Kit and Greta both start the story believing that one of them is deeply flawed and basically a burden to the other. A big part of their journey is discovering the truth: that they’re both flawed, and they’re both strong. To get by in life, they’ll need to rescue each other as the need arises. Making Kit more than the role-reversal “damsel-in-distress” required making him as well-developed a character as Greta, with his own flaws, problems and motivations.
I’m really glad I had time in the second draft to give those to him.